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John Foster
MS. Anthony
Eng. 101-113
February 17, 2014
" Mental Illness Political, Social, and Religious"
Mental illness is a good deal of the people on disability in the United States of
America, so when I hear that they are talking about cutting social security it really upsets me. So
think it is prudent for us to talk about the ramifications of the actions of the Politician’s is of the
up most Importance. We should look at the political, social, and religious aspects.
Politically I don’t agree with policy on Medicare dept. of mental health, F.S.D., social
Security, disability legislation, with the way politicians are going we will no longer have these
Benefits. With the loss of these benefits there will be a lot more homeless people, and a lot more
Crime in my opinion anyway. Politically speaking I do not have much to say that is not hear say
Or innuendo. I do not watch the news so whatever I hear comes from other people like friends. So
Some of my views may not need be or even be close to fact. For that matter my ideas may even
be way out there
.
Social
people don’t understand mental illness, employers won’t hire or give time to
take
or they just won’t to lock us up. People form the dawn of time have always looked down its noses
at what is different always wanting to lock away or destroy what they do not understand
.
Socially speaking those of us with mental illness are viewed as outcast and by some as
Subhuman people.
Religious
I am Christian, Baptist, 10 commandments members of congregation, Bible,
church mental illness but do not think it would have made a difference. Church members tend to
take a spiritual at things; although they are still just people and prone to
their own thoughts.
John – This is a good beginning. Here are some thoughts that will help you as you continue to work on your essay.
ReplyDeleteHigher Order Concerns –
Be sure that you have a strong controlling idea at the beginning of your essay. Your controlling idea is your thesis and you should have a thesis statement that shows your audience what is you are going to share in your essay. As you look back over this draft, and continue to write, ask yourself these questions:
1. Does each paragraph have a strong topic sentence that supports the controlling idea of my essay?
2. Does each paragraph focus on one topic that supports the topic sentence?
Lower Order Concerns –
Be sure each one of your sentence is a complete thought. Leave the parenthesis to Algebra and do not rely on them to replace good strong writing.
Keep writing! ~Ms. A.